I have read news about the air pollution in China. The Guardian news argues that China has finally responded to the challenges caused by air pollution. China has encountered many
problems related with pollution a few times, but it mostly ignored these
problems and took a little measure about pollution. However, this time the problem with pollution
has caused so many debates among citizens that China is left no choice but to
deal with the problem. The measures
taken by government are still inadequate, but China wants to seem at least as
if it is interested in the problem. In my opinion, that the China ignored such
an important issue is quite disappointing and upsetting because when they
ignore this vital problem, they also ignore their citizen’s lives. There can be
two ways to stop the pollution for me. The first way can be to halt or at least
reduce using fossil fuels and using renewable resources because it can be said
that the main reason for air pollution is usually using too much fossil fuels.
When we take into consideration that China is an extremely crowded country,
using fossils fuels even in a little amount can be enough for the pollution.
The second way can be to limit the number of the cars as the China authorities
has decided, but it should be implemented in long term. People should be
encouraged to use bicycle instead of cars.
This situation should also be for all developed countries because in
this way, we can save our world from pollution. To sum up, China should take
serious and long term measures against the air pollution such as using renewable
resources and encouraging people to use bikes.
You can give more examples about pollutions. Apart from these, your examples, supporting sentences is good. You summarize this problem in a clear way. I am very surprised that China ignores pollution.
YanıtlaSilIdeas are grouped into paragraph very well. I think connectors are deficient, so you should use them more. It is easy to follow what you write. All sentences are united with the same idea and there are no irrelevant sentences there. A grammer mistake direct my attention: In my opinion, that the China ignored such an important issue is quite disappointing and upsetting
You can say there, "China's ignorance..."
Do you think how can we prevent this pollution?